Thursday, April 21, 2011

Essay Three Workshop


Sarahi Carranza
Lauren Servais
English 100
April 18, 2011
Essay Three
             A major theme in Smoke Signals is forgiveness. It plays a large role in the development of the story. We specifically see a few characters that have to heavily implement forgiveness into their life. Victor is one of these characters, but he has a bit of a hard time moving on. Thomas is the other character and he’s somewhat of an example for Victor.
            Victor is an intriguing character. He’s very complicated for the fact that he’s emotionally damaged because of what he’s had to experience as a child. Both of his parents were alcoholics. This angered him very much and we can see that in the film. In one of the scenes in the film, his parents are passed out in the middle of the day with beer bottles surrounding them. Victor is outside breaking beer bottles and you can see the frustration and anger that he’s feeling. It’s hard for a young child to see his parents deal with addiction. It’s even harder when they don’t try to better themselves for the sake of their children. Victor experiences this situation and that frustration begins to build.
            To make matters worse, his father abandons him. Victor chases after his father and tries to convince him to stay, but his efforts are in vain. This only adds to his pain, which in return worsens that anger and frustration. He doesn’t hear about his father until he’s informed about his passing. This is a lot for him to deal with. His father’s death

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makes a lot of feelings resurface. He’s always had resentment, but he didn’t deal with it appropriately. This is especially apparent after his father’s death.
            In order for Victor to find peace of mind and to overall improve his emotional health, he needs to come to terms with the things that have happened to him. He needs to forgive his father for the wrong that he did. It’s understandable that this is something very hard for him to accomplish, but it’s necessary. You can’t hold grudges and expect to lead a satisfying life. If you let negative feelings accumulate, you’ll damage yourself more than you’ll damage others.
            Arnold wasn’t a horrible man even though he did leave his son. He wasn’t happy about the choice he made and Victor didn’t consider that this might be the case. Susie mentions to Victor that Arnold didn’t mean to die out there in Arizona. He wanted to return to his son, but something prevented him from going back. It could have been the guilt that he felt or the fear of being rejected by his family. Whatever the case, he longed to be home with his son. Once Victor recognizes that his father didn’t absolutely hate him and he disposes his hate, he begins to heal.
            Thomas is also required to forgive others. The obvious person that he has to forgive is Victor. There has been a lot of hostility coming from Victor. He talks down to him and he often becomes aggravated with him. When he becomes annoyed, he yells at Thomas. This has been going on for a while, but when Victor needs money to travel to Arizona, Thomas is willing to give him the money. He doesn’t ask for repayment, he only asks to come along on the trip. This shows a very admirable quality from his part. He

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doesn’t resent Victor for the treatment he’s giving him. Instead he shows kindness and generosity.
            He’s also had to deal with plenty of hardships. He was a baby when he lost his parents in a fire. This meant that he never enjoyed the company and love that parents have to offer. This alone would be enough to cause someone to become bitter. Once again we see Thomas overcome the bad. He’s not aware that Arnold started the fire that killed his parents, so he can’t directly forgive him. Judging from his character, we can almost be positive that he would forgive him without thinking twice. This attitude has benefited him so much. He has a refreshing personality and we can sense that he’s content with how things have turned out for him. He doesn’t have any regrets or pent up frustration.
            If we stop and take a look at the life that Victor leads and the life that Thomas leads, we see just how important it is to forgive. Smoke Signals permits us to see this a bit more clearly. The changes that Victor makes are a clear indication of what part forgiveness plays in the film. He begins to heal as soon as he accepts his father’s abandonment. If we think about it, one of the most important things in life is growing as a person. Thomas doesn’t have to make many changes, but it’s still a good experience for him. Forgiveness isn’t an issue with him, but after accompanying Victor, he can help him move forward.
            

4 comments:

  1. Sarahi Carranza
    1. What is the writer�s thesis? Victor finding forgiveness in his life and has a hard time moving on after being abandoned by his father. Thomas is another character who is finding forgiveness and also travels with Victor to drop his father’s ashes as well as developing a relationship with Victor through these hard times and their experiences.
    2. Can you find the statement?
    “Victor is one of these characters, but he has a bit of a hard time moving on. Thomas is the other character and he’s somewhat of an example for Victor”.
    3. Is it the main point the rest of the essay works to develop?
    Yes, Sarahi did a great job supporting her thesis statement throughout this paper. Sarahi talks about the struggles Victor has growing up as well as the violence between his parents that lead to his father leaving.
    She also talks about how Thomas has to forgive Victor because of the way he is treated by Victor. Also how he lost in parents in a fire as a baby.
    4. What evidence is cited to prove and support the writer�s
    thesis?
    Sarahi, gives many examples of emotional and physical abuse, hostility that is between Victor and Thomas, money help that develops their relationship and their journey together. She talks about loss and abandonment of these two boys. And then finally they realize the importance of forgiveness.
    What pieces of evidence are cited from the readings and/or the writer�s observations to support the thesis?
    “A major theme in Smoke Signals is forgiveness.”
    “He’s very complicated for the fact that he’s emotionally damaged because of what he’s had to experience as a child.”
    “his father abandons him”
    “In order for Victor to find peace of mind and to overall improve his emotional health, he needs to come to terms with the things that have happened to him. He needs to forgive his father for the wrong that he did.”
    “Thomas is also required to forgive others. The obvious person that he has to forgive is Victor. There has been a lot of hostility coming from Victor.”
    “ If we stop and take a look at the life that Victor leads and the life that Thomas leads, we see just how important it is to forgive.”
    5. Is the writer�s reasoning/critical thinking provided to explain how the evidence proves and supports the thesis?
    Very critical to support the main topic of this paper, she was very clear and concise with her supporting statements.
    6. What else could the writer cite as evidence in this essay? Experiences she may have had in her own life regarding forgiveness that may relate to this story.

    7. What�s strong about the essay?
    I found Sarahi’s strength in this essay was the ability she has to support her thesis so that it is clear and readable and I had a great understanding of what she was trying to bring to the attention of her audience.
    8. What other suggestions or feedback do you want to provide the writer?
    Thank you for the reading and pointers!! I have struggled with clear and concise points and you have given me an ability to see them laid out and I would only suggest that you include some of your own experiences that may relate other than that, I really enjoyed your paper!! Thanks!!

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  2. Your thesis is clear and easy to find. As your essay goes on you can see your thesis is back up with examples from the movie. Your essay contained the right amount of examples where there was no hint of retelling of Smoke Signals. What I suggest is to the transitions between paragraphs flow more with your essay. The way "Susie" was spelled in the movie was like this "Suzy".

    Good Luck

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  3. i'm not too sure about your thesis. It seems too vague and its referring more to the characters rather then the actual topic of forgiveness. You might want to consider revising it and make it really stand out in order to capture the readers attention. Also, you did really great with providing information on how the characters lead to forgiveness, however you might want to include some quotes to support this. Your writing gave a lot of examples of what had happened but not much of critical thinking behind forgiveness. You might want to include that as well as how you may relate to the characters when they came to forgive.

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  4. Your essay is starting off great. As I read your essay to me if feels more like a summary of the movie rather then a critical thinking essay. My suggestion would be when you give the examples of how forgiveness took place maybe go into examples of how Victor's character was after he forgave his father. Give more critical thought about forgiveness and your take on forgiveness in itself.

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